I caught the brown leather ball and started running down the hard turf ground. As I pass my opponents I could hear the clash of pads from my team blocking. I could see the end zone as I pass the yard lines. I could hear the coach and the crowd shouting, “Go,go,go!” As I ran into the end zone and went straight toward my teammates to celebrate. I was so happy to make my first touch down.
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This was crazy! I remember I had a big block
I really enjoyed how you didn’t tell what you were doing until the end of the writing. Even though it was short, it packed in a lot of great detail about how you felt. This writing also displays lots of varying sentence length, which I find very good for writers.
I remember wathching that game it was awesome.